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This Poem by ~Garasu-hidokei:iconGarasu-hidokei:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


This poem is lame;This poem is strange.
It's boring; It's stupid; It wont get me fame.

This poem is red; This poem is green.
This poem is all of the colours not in-between.

Thispoemisshort; T  h  i  s   p  o  e  m   i s   l  o  n  g.
It's entertaining; It's weak; It's strong.

Why are you reading?; Why don't you write?
Why not put pen to paper; Make it dark!; Make it bright!

Were my words that important that you'd continue to read as I write?
It's activity to pass the unbearable night.

Fight through the terror; Don't try and be brave.
Finish this poem and my spirit be raised.

But pay no attention to what my words say,
this poem is lame; this poem is strange.
©2007-2009 ~Garasu-hidokei
:icongarasu-hidokei:

Author's Comments

I was half inspired yesterday to make a poem from, at least a little bit, from the words "This is the dumbest poem I've ever read" and suddenly the thought that would make an interesting poem title...

As you can see I did not use it at the title but rather wanted to make a contradictory or paradoxic poem. I think I succeeded. When I read it and get to the end it's like my imaginary reader is saying "Make up your mind!!"

.....Enjoy~!

Comments


:iconmysticus26:
~Mysticus26 Oct 26, 2007, 3:37:42 PM
cool!

--
I need no signature for I am nothing but a spirit wandering in a world of restless souls.
:iconkitmehsu:
~kitmehsu Oct 26, 2007, 6:47:11 PM
Pretty good, though I think you tried too hard for rhyming, as it get's kinda sing-songy.

--
"Life is too serious....Let's change that"
"The cool wit of a tounge will always win over the hot strangth of an arm"
"I have told the truth
the truth has been scorned
I did all I can
and I can do no more"
[link] Kitsune Komic
:iconamnal:
~amnal Oct 27, 2007, 7:14:14 AM
i like it, the way you played with spacing and capitals was interesting. nice bouncy meter, line 1 in stanza 5 kinda slowed me down, but ts a nice paradoxy poem in the end.

and yes, i do want you ta make up your mind already!

--
gotta love life, even with all the curve balls the game rocks, the earth laughs in flowers, you are a rose , but were always a rose, be excellent to each other, party on dudes! rock on, hang lose, hells ya,enjoy the moment, cause its all you really got.
:icongarasu-hidokei:
~Garasu-hidokei Oct 27, 2007, 9:39:56 PM
Really? Because I just put down whatever first came to my head. So I guess I don't really have a comment then? *shrugs*

--
[link]
:iconawesomeman24:
Mood: Humor ~awesomeman24 Jan 31, 2008, 7:39:13 AM
haha a little humor i like that too

--
let us e'er be merry while we may, for man is but dust, and he hath but a span to live till the worm getteth him.

Robin Hood
(Howard Pyle)
:iconartzydancer234:
~artzydancer234 Mar 14, 2008, 8:26:38 PM
this rocks, i love how the poem draws attention to itself while it's telling you to ignore it.

--
"If your not living life on the edge then your taking up to much space."

[link]
:iconlazypoet09:
~Lazypoet09 Apr 24, 2008, 5:19:47 PM
Hahaha...I like this poem!!! Hee!
:iconvertraut:
~Vertraut May 16, 2008, 11:15:53 AM
its very silverstein-esque, who despite his chilidish nature and subject matter in most of his work is a wondeful poet
:iconjasoncpoorman:
~JasonCPoorman May 18, 2008, 7:47:17 AM
noice!

--
My heart now beats to your tune, the tune of silence, and you have taken me.
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